Family Business

[JaneyE]

WOW! ... Just WOW!

That makes me so happy!

I wasn't really sure what to think of Pip and Lyra's adventures as first, ...

Hmm... I hope you didn't skip through that part though. I enjoyed so much writing it because it gave me a chance to characterise both Lyra and Pip, and indirectly also Tori.

... but it all came together in the end.

Of course it did! I like to think I don't do threadless stitching.

Lyra now a full fledged glove lover. It's like she made a complete 180 turn!

But it's not unrealistic, is it? Come on! We saw it coming and knew it would eventually happen. We just needed the right guardian angel to push her over the edge. And I love that guardian angel! She's so fun to write, and I would so fall in love with her IRL.

I was disappointed in Priya

I know. But that's the trouble with real people. They all disappoint us sooner or later -- even those we love. But sometimes that's necessary in order for them and us to grow and to build a better relationship. Don't you think?

(Yes, I know they are not real people, but they are real to me. They have been living in my head for more than a year already, and they do really have a mind of their own. As I said, stubborn cows! And I hope they are real to those of you who are still aboard.)

also disappointed she didn't start wearing those satin gloves all the time.

Sorry about that. But I can't have every single character be a glove fetishist, can I? That would be unrealistic. So no, Priya is not a glove fetishist, but she's starting to like to wear gloves, and there is more gloved Priya to come. But there is one particular reason why she's getting into gloves. What reason? We will see. As I said, these girls are stubborn, and I only get to stalk them in real time. Who knows what they're gonna do tomorrow?

Too bad there's no poll this time... maybe next chapter?

Yeah, really bad because I have absolutely no feedback on how many people are reading But that was really no good spot for a poll. But I promise the next chapter will have a poll.

[Someguy]

Hmm... I hope you didn't skip through that part though. I enjoyed so much writing it because it gave me a chance to characterise both Lyra and Pip, and indirectly also Tori.

No I didn't skip it, but while I was reading about their road-trip, I kept thinking, 'Where is she going with this?' It was a good buildup to the scene where Pip convinces Lyra to wear the gloves.

But it's not unrealistic, is it? Come on! We saw it coming and knew it would eventually happen.

Yeah I knew eventually she was gonna come around, but it's just so funny that a few chapters ago, she was so against the idea of even wearing gloves, and now she's wearing them ALL THE TIME! Like I said, big change. In fact, I was hoping for it to happen sooner, so the buildup has finally paid off!

But that's the trouble with real people. They all disappoint us sooner or later -- even those we love.

Oh yeah. I've certainly lost friends for even more silly reasons. I just hope the two can reconcile soon. Obviously, we're in that third act where the main characters are at each other's throats, but they come around eventually.

But I can't have every single character be a glove fetishist, can I?

... I was kinda hoping you would

I have absolutely no feedback on how many people are reading

I know the feeling... But I can tell you that I'm enjoying the story! Keep it up.

[glovefetish]

Dear Miss JaneyE,

This an absolutely fantastic and superb chapter and it made my last night awesome! Thank you so much!
You are a very talented writer and I love to read the descriptions about the environment and all the small details. Yes, I really surprised when Lyra became a glove fetishist. At least I didn't mind Lyra have chosen the "glove sisters" but if Priya really loved her, she would forgive her sooner or later, I reckon.
Keep on writing JaneyE, everyone is waiting for the eighth episode and I am just hoping there will be more fetish latex gloved sex between Lyra and Tori.
I am also curious how will be the annual glove-party at Tori's family....

[LatexGloves4Life]

HOLY @#$%!!!

That was abosolutly an AMAZING READ.

First of all, I must say Miss JaneyE. That was such a briliant chapter that I was just BLOWN AWAY! I like the way you describe the areas it makes me feel like I'm right there in person myself. Although, I have never been to any of the places or in the UK for a matter of fact. So to me this is WOW!

I really enjoy Pip and how she convinced Lyra that she has ALWAYS been a glove fetishist. The way how Tori & Lyra got back together aftertheir fight is how can I put it....wait for it...LEGENDARY!!! It's a shame that Priya has been acting like a total BITCH. Then again, it's like you said "But that's the trouble with real people. They all disappoint us sooner or later -- even those we love." I totally agree with this since I lost a good friend over some stupid silly thing. Eventually after quite sometime I saw him again and everything was like as if nothing happend & we are buddies again.

Keep up the excellent and amzing writing that you are doing I LOVE reading your story. Can't wait for the next chapter and see what unfolds.

Eric

[JaneyE]

Hi Eric,

thank you for your words. It's so nice to read such nice feedback. In German we have a saying to express how that feels like: "Balsam für die Seele" (balm for the soul).

I'm so happy that you're enjoying the novel, and I'm especially happy about what you wrote regarding the description of the various places. When I write I think very thoroughly how to describe what Lyra sees to make the readers feel transported INTO the scene. It's not easy, so I'm happy that it's working for some people.

As for Priya, don't be angry with her. After all, she's very disappointed in Lyra and acting like that only because she doesn't know how to cope with her feelings. It happens to real people, too.

By the way, I'm happy to announce that the next chapter is nearly finished. I finished the second draft on Thursday, and I will making a last revision today and tomorrow. It will be online soon. I'm very curious about the reception of the new chapter because it's going to be a crazy chapter!

Janey

[JaneyE]

Hi all,

the newest chapter is finally online! This chapter was especially hard to write because the story has arrived at a crucial point where a lot of stuff that can affect the story's final outcome is happening very fast. Planning the scenes and deciding where to put which tiny piece of information requires a lot of work, and I needed 24 sessions (4 hours each) to finish this chapter. But doing the final revision read (aloud) and seeing your characters become alive in front of your eyes is a huge reward! If you have fantasies and ideas for stories, I can only recommend you write them down! It's so much fun!

And talking about fun, I hope you have fun reading Chapter 8 of Family Business:



And don't forget to vote: http://www.easypolls.net/poll.html?p=54 ... bebe298618

Janey

[Stefansquire88]

Hi Janey,
I just finished the new chapter. You need to publish this story as a novel! Such is your immense gift.

This Chapter is mesmerizing.the character development is really amazing and difficult because you've introduced even more characters.

You also have a mastery of imagery, like this, which I will edit so as not to reveal anything to people who have yet to read it, No spoilers!

I hug her, reclining my head on her shoulder. Smelling her perfume and feeling her soft, glossy hair against my cheek provokes a sensation like thousand tiny butterflies flying in my stomach. It’s a new feeling I’ve never had before in my life. It’s good but disturbing at the same time.
We go back to the building. The tiny butterflies fly out of my mouth, a long stream of yellow butterflies flapping their minuscule wings around our heads, obscuring our vision and judgement. She is right. This is starting to become confusing, and that’s not good. I escort ---- to her office. Before going in, she stops for a second and looks me in the eyes. She bites on her lip and puts her hand on my shoulder.
“Yes?” I ask anxiously...... She goes into her office and the stream of yellow butterflies manages to disappear into the room just before the door closes. I’m left behind with not one single butterfly whirring around my head or flapping its wings in my empty stomach.

That is beautiful writing. You even end this chapter with a big surprise. I will cast my vote shortly, but not until more of my fellow forum members read your work. It is lovely. Thank you so much for all of the effort to develop this work.

Stefan

PS I would appreciate an invitation to the next fashion unveiling!

[Someguy]

I know this will probably sound redundant but... WOW!

You've really outdone yourself this time Janey. The work really shows.

Boy where to start... (Spoilers ahead)

Well the inclusion of Amélie really complicates things (in a good way). I unfortunately know what it's like to be in Lyra's situation... Their French conversations, and Lyra's frustrations (hey that rhymes) were very entertaining. I did find myself trying to translate the French text (I speak a little bit).

The first party with Tori's friends was also fun, I love the idea of all of them wearing gloves!

I was also very happy to see the scene with Priya, made up for the sad scene in the last chapter. I'm very curious how their relationship is going to pan out...

All the stuff with the family was great, that scene where Lyra hears about Tori and Amélie was really intense. And the whole time Pip and Amélie are running off alone together, I'm thinking, "What are they doing?" (I'll talk about that in a second).

I have to admit though, I LOLed hard at the "performing live at the Apollo" comment. I could just imagine two white posh Brits performing at the Apollo theater... BAHAHAHAHA!!!

Oh and that hairdresser scene... Man that was hot! "So here we are, four customers wearing leather opera gloves, being made up and styled by four latex-gloved lasses." AWESOME!!!

And man, so much going on at that party. It was a spectacular scene to say the least.

That cliffhanger really makes up for the lack of poll in the next chapter... I WANNA KNOW WHO IT IS!!!

Okay, so to answer your poll:

Well the obvious choice would be Tori and Amélie (and it looks like that's the favorite answer). I mean it makes sense, this has been building up for the entire chapter and would explain Lyra's reaction. I think that's the confrontation everyone's waiting for. The only question is: why were they in Pip's room? Maybe this is why the waiter called Mr. Simmons away; maybe Pip told him about it. I dunno...

However, to go a little outside the box, I'd like to choose Pip and Amélie. The two of them have been off on their own since they got to the mansion, maybe the two of them are becoming an item, and this can all be explained in the aftermath. Maybe Amélie is doing it to "get back" at Tori, maybe they genuinely have feelings for each other. And since Amélie is a glove fetishist, it makes sense why both of them would leave their gloves on. This option would also make more sense why this is happening in Pip's room and would make for a very unexpected confrontation between Tori, her sister, and her ex-girlfriend. This might actually bring Tori and Lyra closer together.

I could also see Pip and Cara together, maybe both of them getting back at her sister, but I'm not that into it.

Another pairing / trio to suggest: Well for a weird, crazy turn of events, howabout Tori and Cara? Or better yet, Tori, Cara AND Amélie?! That might be going overboard, but... you asked!

Anyway, great chapter, can't wait for the next one!

[JaneC09]

This chapter was really good. The conflicts and questions from the last chapter all came together here. I knew you could do it!

I loved the moment with Priya. She just steals the chapter everytime she's in the story. I really want to see these two just get together and get it over with, but then it wouldn't be much of a story now would it?

I would have liked to know more about Amelie's character. She's very interesting, but seeing as how this is from Lyra's point of view, it makes more sense that we don't know much about her. I hope there's more to come with her in the next chapter. As much as I hate to say it, I really want to see her and Tori get back together; and Lyra and Priya to become an item.

Of course, the last poll is obvious: It's Priya and Marco!
JK I chose Amelie and Vicky! The choice is obvious.

The other Janey

[dopefish]

Wow Lyra doesn't have much luck with friends. Tori and Priya just push her around and give ultimatums like its nothing.